IELTS Writing Task 2: A both-view/opinion essay about lead-positions in company by elders or youngers; with structure and 8.0+ model answer with explanations

IELTS Writing Task 2: A both-view/opinion essay about lead-positions in company by elders or youngers; with structure and 8.0+ model answer with explanations

This IELTS Writing Task 2 post deals with a both-view/opinion essay on a controversial topic which is ‘executive positions in companies or organizations by elders or youngers’. The post contains the structures and notes to write the answer effectively along with a 8.0+ model answer and explanations. 

IELTS Writing Task 2: both-view topic /opinion topic

Recent exam question:

Some people say that the leaders or directors of different organisations are often old people who can be replaced by younger people sometimes while others disagree.

What is your opinion about it?

Structure of the essay followed:

Paragraph no. 1:

Presentation of the topic, Thesis statement and outline

Paragraph no. 2: Body paragraph 1:

Description of how aged people contribute in managerial positions; with real-life example,

Paragraph no. 3: Body paragraph 2:

Description of how young people contribute in higher positions; with real-life example,

Paragraph no. 4:

Conclusion of the topic by restating the thesis and personal opinion.


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Model answer:

It is an undeniable fact that a good number of leaders and higher-ranking executives are generally older people. Aged people bring in a lot of special attributes to any organization and so their demand in different companies is noteworthy. Nonetheless, I believe that young people who show brilliance and talent in managerial works should be given opportunities in top positions in workplaces. This essay will focus on the benefits of both the cases and favour the latter group’s contribution over the former.

On one side of the coin, elderly people possess some special skills, if compared to their younger counterparts. Initially, their cognitive skills or long-term visions, due to their work and life experience, make them incomparable to the young workers. The aged people have learned to face challenges by failing and not giving up which has made their mentality and attitude as solid as a diamond. To explain, my late grandfather, who was a co-operative inspector, saved his company from some inevitable dangers only because he had experience and strong willpower on which his seniors took faith and gave him all the responsibilities and he served as was expected.

On the flip side, younger directors can also be considered as complement in vital positions in different companies and organizations. Principally, their enthusiasm, high qualifications and up-to-date knowledge on this 21st century work-culture and the understanding of empathy with other workers and clients can be an added benefit for in big corporations. Furthermore, their acquaintance with state-of-the-art technology and the courage to apply them in company culture can reduce workload for all and this can neutralize any kind of typecast in management and develop productivity. As an example, all the tech-giants such as Google, Apple, Microsoft regularly employ young people in leadership positions.

In fine, I firmly believe that the selection of executive positions ought not to be based on age. A skilled person with firm determination and positive attitude, even though junior to many, can take companies to the pinnacle of success which has often been proved by younger people and the companies can be the beneficiary of this.    

Word count: 350

Expected score: 8.0 +

Reasons explained:

TA or Task response:

The model answer converses both sides of the argument in the same measure (discussion on how aged people and young people can contribute to company success) and finishes with a clear opinion (young people are a better force). The writer includes background information and examples. The essay meets the word requirement yet it’s not more than 360 words. (350 words to be exact).

CC or Coherence and cohesion:

The model answer is obviously planned to have 4 paragraphs, with everybody paragraph talking about a different side of the dispute. The connection between paragraphs is clearly indicated by words like On the one side of the coin, On the flip side and In fine. The ideas are expanded additionally with reasonable links such as Initially, To explain, As an example, Principally, Furthermore, etc.

LR or Lexical resource:

The writer uses higher-level vocabulary relevant to the topic such as revive, presume, alternative, numerous and interval. Words like relaxation and physical exercise have been systematically paraphrased. Spelling is correct throughout the model answer. Repetition of the same words has been avoided intelligently.

GRA or Grammatical range and accuracy:

The writer uses an extensive variety of grammatical features including concessive clauses (which, while…), relative clauses (who, that…), and other sentences with compound and complex forms. There are no grammatical errors in the model essay.

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